Comment+Inventory+Sheet


 * __ Advanced Composition -- An Essay Draft Comment Inventory Sheet __**
 * YOUR IDEOLOGY: A Brief Exploration **
 * Dr. J. Halden-Sullivan STUDENT'S NAME _ **
 * Please pay attention to the following suggestions as you revise the attached draft: **
 * _ Re-think your choice of AUDIENCE / GENRE. **
 * _ Make your essay's PURPOSE more distinct. **
 * _ Re-consider how fully this piece reveals //what you believe// / //your// //worldview//. **
 * _ Sharpen the FOCUS of your reflections. **
 * _ Deepen your REFLECTION on the //meaning// of your IDEOLOGY. **
 * _ Re-think how effectively you engage readers in your INTRODUCTION. **
 * _ //I want to know more//: EXPAND your explanations / examples. **
 * _ Sharpen your // defining details//, your ANCHORS in experience. **
 * _ Reconsider your TONE. You sound __.__ **
 * ___ Re-think / clarify / strengthen your TRANSITIONS.__ **
 * ___ Re-think your //organizing principle // in this draft .__ **
 * ___ Re-think how effectively you engage readers in your CONCLUSION.__ **
 * ___ Check your //sentence pattern variety//.__ **
 * ___ Re-think the //precision// of your WORD CHOICES / PHRASING. __ **
 * ___ Please proofread for and control technical difficulties with:__ **
 * frag. fs cs agr. commas with coordination/subordination **
 * commas semi-colons colons poss. rep. ww wf pp. **
 * ___ When I read this draft, I really like __ **
 * _ Additional revision tips for you: **
 * _ Grade range of this draft: **
 * [A] [B] [C] [r & r] [other] **