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 * __ Advanced Composition -- An Essay Draft Comment Inventory Sheet __**
 * EXPERIMENTS IN CLASSICAL & ROGERIAN ARGUMENT **
 * Dr. J. Halden-Sullivan STUDENT'S NAME _ **
 * Please pay attention to the following suggestions as you revise the attached draft: **
 * _ Re-think your choice of AUDIENCE / GENRE. **
 * _ Make your essay's PURPOSE more distinct. **
 * _ Re-align your draft with the structure of CLASSICAL / ROGERIAN arguments (see Coe) **
 * _ Re-think how effectively you engage readers in your INTRODUCTION. **
 * _ Sharpen your THESIS: what is //your argumentative edge//? **
 * _ //I want to know more//: EXPAND your explanations / your research. **
 * _ //Where do you stand?// Explain YOUR POSITION more fully, more deliberately. **
 * _ REFER TO //your chosen article// more often to develop your claims. **
 * _ //Explain// / //interpret //more fully your article / sources. **
 * _ Reconsider your TONE. You sound __.__ **
 * ___ Check to see if your paragraphs have TOPIC SENTENCES that clearly__ **
 * develop / expand / relate to your thesis. **
 * ___ Re-think / clarify / strengthen your TRANSITIONS.__ **
 * ___ Re-think //the order of points//.__ **
 * ___ Re-think how effectively you engage readers in your CONCLUSION.__ **
 * ___ Check your //sentence pattern variety//.__ **
 * ___ Re-think the //precision// of your WORD CHOICES / PHRASING.__ **
 * _ __// INTEGRATE YOUR QUOTATIONS// more smoothly: use //credit tags// and/or__ **
 * //signal phrases// TO COMPLETE THE SYNTAX OF YOUR SENTENCE. **
 * ___ Please proofread for and control technical difficulties with:__ **
 * frag. fs cs poss. rep. commas with coordination/subordination **
 * agr. unnecessary commas semi-colons colons ww wf pp. **
 * punctuating in-text citations punctuating quotations **
 * ___ Re-think your //Works Cited// page documentation.__ **
 * ___ When I read this draft, I really like __ **
 * _ Additional revision tips for you: **
 * _ Grade range of this draft: **
 * [ A ] [ B ] [ C ] [ r & r ] [ other ] **